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Title: "Dark Impaler" story update (revision)
Post by ThickWilAuthor on Nov 5^th, 2011, 12:19pm

I made a bit of revision to chapter 2 of "The Dark Impaler". I fleshed out a scene here and there, mostly at the end, which I thought seemed a bit rushed and non-descriptive.